Where the Sheep Are Nervous

[gabbehhh]

This is the very first story I am posting here in CoDz, but hopefully not my last (: This is a story I have been working on. However, the original one I wrote didn't have zombies in it so I am currently revising it to have zombies. I am really excited

I will be posting little by little so I won't make you guys read to much at a time (: I am open to criticism and suggestions. I am no perfectlemonade, but I will do my best c:

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Chapter 1

     At that point Zach was practically dragging himself across the blistering desert. The intense heat made the desolate inferno wasteland look skewed and distorted, so at first, he thought it to be some mirage. It gradually grew larger until a white Las Vegas police car had come to a stop a couple of feet from where he stood, limping. A tall, fair-skinned woman with long dark glossy hair and reflecting black aviator sunglasses stepped out of the squad car. She wore tall combat boots, black skinny jeans and a white tank top. A little under-dressed for a cop, Zach thought before her badge, which was clipped to her belt loop, blinded him as it glistened with the sun's toxic rays. Zach looked up at her, her hair waving and fluttering in the solar wind. She pointed an odd looking gun at his leg then shot. He looked down expecting to see his leg half blown off, only to see a little green dart. "Well that tickled," Zach thought to himself. The shiny little green dart blurred out of focus. He fell to his knees, and then he knocked out.

     "Good morning Sunshine, welcome to out beautiful Las Vegas Police Department Interrogation Room," she said with a smile so clearly false on her face. Her sarcasm was beginning to annoy the humor out of Zach. Besides, he had seen many movies and detective shows to know where he was, so he didn't respond. She tried again, "Good afternoon Mr...." There was a brief pause as the young-looking woman scanned her file sheets for reference.

     Zach tried to speak, but his parched mouth struggled to move. As he opened his mouth, his dried lips ripped open, and he began to bleed again. He winced in pain as he attempted to speak once more. "I... Uh..." was all his dry lips managed to mumble. He could feel the intimidating stares from whoever was on the other side of the double-sided mirror to his left.

     "Three others and I came to Las Vegas to celebrate my twenty-first birthday, thinking it would be the best weekend ever, and it pretty much was..." Zach wheezed and chuckled, "You know, four of us twenty-one year olds living it up in Sin City for the first time in out lives, partying like there was no tomorrow..." He smiled weakly thinking about it. "Not even thinking that there could be no tomorrow..."

Chapter 2

     He clenched his fist as he paused briefly.

     "It soon got late and we began to worry. We tried contacting his cell, but it was apparently out of service. We waited all Sunday, but decided to drive back home that night. After all, he knew where his car was. He'd come back on his own."

     A soft, crunching noise could be heard with each step he took toward the hood. "Sand? Well, where the heck are we?" he asked in bewilderment. He hadn't noticed when he drove off the road. Now, they were in the middle of the desert. Fantastic.

     Zach grabbed Jenny's hand, giving it a reassuring squeeze, and placed his lips lightly on her forehead. "Don't worry Babe, we can go check what's over there." He motioned with his chin toward the dim glitter of light. With that, she seemed to ease down.

     "Uh, NTY. No Thank You," she said in her usual prissy attitude. "I am perfectly comfortable here." She paused the delicate procedure of filing her nails and glanced out the window, past Jenny, until her green eyes came upon the light. "Hmm, that seems like a long way for you guys to walk alone..." For a moment, Jenny believed Brittney might actually consider joining the walk. However, Brittney quickly killed Jenny's optimism with her sardonic, wide Colgate smile. "Well, have fun you two!"

[tab][/tab]"Okay," Jenny said, trying to stay as optimistic as she could. "We won't take too long." With that said, Jenny and Zach headed out into the star-filled night.

[MyLittleHellhound]

This is a really good first chapter gabbehhh, I'm interested to see where this goes

Great work, and I expect to see more added :D

[Lizizadolphin]

What an amazing read!! Keep up the good work :D

[darkflareon]

It's really good and has alot of detail. It's really enjoyable and the first chapter leaves huge suspence over the other.

Although I really enjoyed it there are point in the second chapter where it should be said in first person not third as the guy is talking. That is the only critasisum I have to make and cant wait to read more.

-Flareon