Follow You Down (Ballad of a Dead Man)

[NaBrZHunter]

I used to write a lot of music and poetry...but it's been a long time. I've begun again, though, since New Years and it's starting to smooth out, I think. I felt okay about the following, so I figgered I'd swaller me pride and stick it out here. It should be pretty simple to decipher. This is the first time I've written poetry/lyrics on this particular subject matter. Any fellow poets, grammatical/structural feedback is most welcome!

These shaking hands are no longer mine
Tooth and nail I fought you for my mind
From the shadows inside a black fog creeps
Concealing from myself my own defeat
Facing the horror, I’m your puppet on a string
The constant violence buries everything.

Questions of time and space 
Mean nothing to me now
Caught in the whirlwind we face
I’ll follow you down
Until the heavens rain hell

Memories of a life I never had:
My mind is overwhelmed by this madness.
I question the very words I say, 
The actions I take and thoughts I entertain
I don’t remember when I lost myself
And fear I’ll wake from crystaline comfort.

Questions of time and space 
Mean nothing to me now
Caught in the whirlwind we face
I’ll follow you down
Until the heavens rain hell

My noble thoughts inscribed in blood I shed
The fog has lifted and now I see red
I swear I will destroy them all for her,
I’ll restore my lost and shattered honor

Questions of time and space 
Mean nothing to me now
Caught in the whirlwind we face
I’ll follow you down
Until I bring Hell back to you.

[anonymous]

Awesome, didnt know you made songs like this yourself.

Great lyrics

[NaBrZHunter]

20 hours ago, anonymous said:

Awesome, didnt know you made songs like this yourself.

Great lyrics

Thanks, man! I never have written anything pertaining to this before, but I used to write a lot of music...I'm trying to get it back now. 

[anonymous]

1 hour ago, NaBrZHunter said:

Thanks, man! I never have written anything pertaining to this before, but I used to write a lot of music...I'm trying to get it back now. 

If all your songs are like this one, you really should.

[HitmanVere]

Pretty smexy lyrics. I used to be in a band few years ago and I loved being in it, but it fell down due to other band members just losing interest :/ I had written few songs though with them and they had potential :P Need to start doing this kind of stuff again, lol